7 Tips to Writing a Better Short Story

7 Tips to Writing a Better Short Story

Short stories are a pretty big thing on the Bayley Bulletin contests; we have at least two contests per year dedicated to them, and maybe more in the future.

So, that means that doing a great job on them is critical for scoring that finalist prize, or getting an honorable mention.

The tips in this article break down key areas in short story writing that you can start focusing on right now.

1. Seton’s Short Story Guide

Your Seton English counselors have crafted a mini ‘course’ to give you the best chance at succeeding in the short story contests. You should definitely read it, and reread it. There’s lots to learn. :)

This is excerpted from the intro:

A short story is a single event in a person’s life, or an event in a situation. No extraneous time is spent on detail, backstory or relationships, unless it directly relates to the single message of the story. Everything unnecessary is whittled out, in the same way that a good joke is reduced to the barest elements to set you up for a memorable punchline.

This is not to say that short stories are mathematical or scientific in their presentation. Not at all; they can be breathtaking, rich with description and lovely with people. They can also be gripping with action, or filled with soul-searing tragedy.

The key takeaway here is don’t try to do too much with your character development.

Within the confines of a short story, it’s almost impossible to craft a believable conversion story, changing someone’s point of view from one opposite to another. A short story does better to focus on a moment during that process, perhaps the hinge moment when they’re ready to start a change.

All of us go through cycles of doubt, faith, rediscovery, deepening, shallowness and effort. Trying to pack all that in turns your story into a novel.

You can expect a different character at the end of a novel, but in a short story, they will largely be the same character. Perhaps the events trigger the beginning of a change, or was the final push they needed.

That being said, sometimes a dramatic conversion works – like St. Paul’s moment on the road to Damascus. But it took him a long period of reflection afterward to fully embrace the implications. Run your story by friends and family before submitting, and ask them if the character’s choices feel believable, if a person would really do that/react that way under the circumstances.

Be sure to check it out here, and there are plenty of example stories for you to read!

Read this Mini Course 

2. Focus on Sensory Detail

This comes up repeatedly as an area to work on. By inputting plenty of detail about what the characters hear, smell, and see, you’re ‘hacking’ the brain of your reader to draw them more fully into the story. With strong, clear descriptions, you jog these memories that bring the narrative to life.

Describing what the character sees, and forgetting the rest of their senses, is an easy trap to fall into. Try varying it up by describing what is heard as much as what is seen. Usually you can cut down on the amount of visual description by focusing on what they hear and feel.

Smell is frequently overlooked; it will take some serious imagining about how your environment is used, and what kinds of scents are in the air at that time and place.

When you get it right, you create a story driven by a dramatic incorporation of the senses, which paints vivid pictures and draws up memories of sounds and smells.

You make it easier for your characters to connect with your story and character.

3. Do Your Research.

Even a little research goes a long way.

It’s particularly evident when someone writes a story off the top of their head – unless they’re a pro, or deeply researched into the time and period. When someone writes a story focusing on what they know from movies, or passive reading over the years, the story automatically lacks depth and detail.

Grab a couple of books from the library on your era, and focus on filling up your mind with the time period, foods, types of clothing, customs and so on. Even a little research will dramatically improve your story, because you will be working with details that make your story more distinct, more concrete.

By grounding your narrative with plenty of concrete details, you not only give yourself more inspiration for things to write about, but boost your reader’s confidence that you know what you’re talking about, and that they can trust you to deliver a great tale.

4. Don’t be Austen-tacious.

This one’s a funny one. :) I know I did this *all the time* when writing, and was a challenge to forget.

It’s because Seton students—and plenty of others—are raised on reading the classics, rich and deep sources of insight, inspiration and characterization.

But to a beginning writer, we subconsciously draw from the wells at which we drink. Our language tends to reflect the  kinds of books we read.

A lot of the young authors writing for our contests are working hard to mature their style, and develop their tone. They fall into the trap of using words, and turns of phrase, that might work well in a Jane Austen novel. Since we no longer live or write in the Regency era, it clashes with the average reading experience. The writing is ‘Austen-tacious’.

The best advice I can give is to focus on just writing clearly. It’s like taking martial arts, or practicing any craft; you start by doing basics, over and over. And with time, you take those basics and apply them to your interpretation of martial arts, and develop something unique. But it all has to start with a mastery of the basics. Any painter or musician knows what I mean. :)

With writing, the ‘basics’ are learning to quickly and easily communicate your scene into the mind of your reader.

Focus on clear, simple writing.

A great tool I strongly recommend that you make your friend is the Hemingway Editor. Once you’ve written your first draft, copy everything and paste it in there. It will help you make your writing bold and clear, the exact combo you need to stay focused.

Try the Hemingway Editor

5. Think through the implications.

Often we get hooked on a particularly fun direction for our story. And then we get tunnel vision, focusing on just telling that super cool idea.

Perhaps you share it with a reader, and then they ask you all kinds of questions. That’s when you realize that you have plot holes everywhere, and the story falls apart.

Don’t worry about it, everyone does it. :) But you can shore up against potential plot holes by doing your research, and grounding your story in greater detail. That will automatically help.

But there are other areas that you will need to think through, in particular characterization. Would you character really do this? Would they say this? If they did, what happens next? What will friends and family think? How will it affect their afternoon, or the rest of their life? Could a person really do this at that time, in that place?

Taking the time to think these questions through as best you can will help you tell a more believable, and intriguing story. Try chatting about your concept with friends and family, asking them if there’s anything that doesn’t fit, or feels funny, or could be make better.

6. Protag it.

In writing terms, your main character is referred to as the protagonist. A protagonist has one mission in the story: he/she protags. Or does stuff. He’s the reason we’re pinning the story around him, because he makes choices and takes the action forward.

A protagonist who isn’t protagging, isn’t a protagonist. Look at your story and see who’s the one actually doing something, and making choices that affect the flow of your story. Maybe they’re really your protagonist. Either way, they’re certainly more interesting.

Your main character should be always doing something, even if its a mistake that he can learn from. We want to read about bold choices, actions taken, and the character dealing with the consequences. Ultimately, we want a conclusion that arises from their actions, not something that just happens to them.

If your character is spending too much time meditating, or thinking, or being passive, and letting the story happen to them, time to sharpen your pencil and get creative.

Perhaps in your story, there’s nothing the character can do to affect the outcome. If so, then focus on finding ways for them to be active, perhaps working at cross-purposes to the conclusion.

Get protagging. :)

7. Write, write write.

There’s nothing that works so well as writing all the time. The best writers find ten minutes or a half hour every day to write something.

Over time, with the repeated use of the writing craft, thinking about applying the rules you learn, and listening to feedback from friends, fans and family, you’ll get better.

And the better you get, the better you’ll do in the contests. And the harder you’ll make our jobs as judges.

Bonus Tip: Avoid Adverbs.

Thanks to a student in the comments, here’s a bonus tip about avoiding adverbs.

Adverbs change the meaning of verbs, adjectives, or other adverbs. Many end in ‘ly’, such as abruptly, wearily, sorrowfully, uneasily, briskly, etc.

It isn’t ‘wrong’ to have lots of adverbs, but you can think of them as a ‘short form’ version of your action. Instead of taking that opportunity to share a detail about what the character is doing, or how they’re interacting with others/the environment, an adverb takes all that action and compresses it into a single word.

It’s the difference between ‘showing’ and ‘telling’. The best writing works hard to be showing you what’s going on, not just telling you what happened.

So, for example; “Decimus tore off his cloak and threw it against the wall, letting it tumble into a heap on the stack of polishing tools.” – as opposed to “Decimus tore off his cloak roughly.”

Eliminating adverbs forces you to show the reader what that adverb implies.

Obviously, not all need to go, but’s a great writing practice to avoid them. :)

To sum up:

The students who do really well and forge into the finalists’ places are the ones who:

  1. Keep the story focused on a particular event, or set of events. The main character doesn’t change drastically from beginning to end, because there isn’t enough time to realistically process that much change within a person.
  2. Bring in as many senses as you can to ground the story in plenty of concrete detail. This always brings it to life – and sure makes it more interesting to write!
  3. A little research goes a long way, and will even jog your creativity in ways you can’t imagine. Research helps your story feel more believable, and build confidence in the reader that they should stick around to the end.
  4. Avoid Austen-taciousness. It’s an easy trap, but one you can avoid by focusing on writing clearly and boldly, without fancy language or trying to sound like the classics.
  5. Think through the implications of your character’s decisions, and how they might impact your story. Check with other people if the situation is believable, and how people might really act, or react.
  6. Keep your protagonist always ‘protagging’. No one is interested in a passive main character. The reason you pick them as the protagonist is because they make the story happen; it’s their choices that bring about the conclusion.
  7. Always be writing. Even if it’s once a week, find a little time to be creative and write. With time, you’ll learn how to apply the rules, and when to break them. And you’ll accelerate your ability as a writer, and craft stuff folk can’t put down.

So, what did you think? Any questions stand out in your mind at this point?

Ask me below, and I’ll do my best to answer!

About Dominic de Souza

Dominic de Souza is pipe-smoking, sword-wielding, book-loving Catholic author who loves writing, reading and illustration. Dominic is married to Maria, and heads up the Visual Arts Department for Seton Home Study School.

32 Comments

  1. Emily McKinnon

    Wow. This is extremely helpful, Dominic. Thank you so much! I’m going to have to keep coming back and reading this till I get the hang of it, haha. :) Thanks again!

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  2. Giselle Faber

    Really great article!!:) Thank you so much for the tips!:)

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  3. Elodie Pierlot

    this is such a helpful article, I never thought of some of those ideas… like Austen-taciousness :))

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    • Dominic de Souza

      It’s an interesting word, isn’t it? :) Glad it helped you.

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    • Amelia Coleman

      I wonder if it has anything to do with Jane Austen… ;)

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      • Elodie Pierlot

        Haha…. :P

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  4. Veronica Brown (Goyette)

    Haha this was good to read. I know I fell into a couple of these with my entry for the contest.

    Though this article was also helpful for me to remember with my novel too, it’s a great reminder, especially since I wasn’t able to write for about six months last year and only recently got back into it a few weeks before entering.

    Sorry for my rambling, this was a good article, I enjoyed very much reading it <3

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    • Dominic de Souza

      Glad you enjoyed it! Good luck with your novel. :)

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  5. Giselle Faber

    I have one question: so is it wrong to have a lot of adverbs in my story? I put it in the Hemingway Editor and that was my main problem. But my sentences seem so boring if I don`t spice them up a bit. Is that being Austen-tacious or what? Do I need to get rid of all of my adverbs?

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    • Dominic de Souza

      That’s a great question, Giselle. Of course, I can’t say it’s ‘wrong’ to have lots of adverbs, but I’ll tell you what they do to your story. Think of them as a ‘short form’ version of your action. Instead of taking that opportunity to share a detail about what the character is doing, or how they’re interacting with others/the environment, an adverb takes all that action and compresses it into a single word. It’s the difference between ‘showing’ and ‘telling’. The best writing works hard to be showing you what’s going on, not just telling you what happened.

      So, for example; “Decimus tore off his cloak and threw it against the wall, letting it tumble into a heap on the stack of polishing tools.” – as opposed to “Decimus tore off his cloak roughly.”

      Eliminating adverbs forces you to show the reader what that adverb implies. Obviously, not all need to go, but’s a great writing practice to avoid them. :)

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    • Amelia Coleman

      @gisellefaber:disqus I can relate, I had like 100 more adverbs than necessary :)

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      • Giselle Faber

        Lol, yea, same here. It is hard to write without them!!!:)

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        • Amelia Coleman

          Well, you must have fixed them all, because you’re still in:)

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          • Giselle Faber

            Lol, not really. I still had way too many. But I guess they didn`t mind too much….:)

          • Amelia Coleman

            I guess not! For my story, I just ignored them and mainly focused on fixing the hard and very hard to read sentences:) I think they got rid of mine because I didn’t do enough with fixing the plot. I changed it drastically and then changed it drastically again, so I think I may have just made it worse:) Oh well:) Good luck!

          • Giselle Faber

            Ugh, yea, that is one of my weaknesses. I tend to write really long and complicated sentences. It is funny, I left the story alone and didn`t touch it after I entered it, and then when I went back to edit it a bit ago, it was like wow I wrote that? And in a month or whenever when I go back and look at it again, I`ll think of a million things I should have done different!!

          • Amelia Coleman

            Haha – well, obviously your way was better! Yeah, like, the first sentence was: “The pale gold sunlight of mid-afternoon filtered through the palm leaves and splashed messily, only slightly diluted, across the well-worn streets of Jerusalem.” That qualified as a very hard to read sentence. Lol

          • Giselle Faber

            Lol, I like it!! Yea, my first sentence qualified as hard to read too, but I liked it too much to change. And I guess it didn`t matter!!:) So, where do you live again? (sorry, I know I have asked that before, but I can`t remember!:))

          • Amelia Coleman

            Yeah, I didn’t change it at first, but then I did because I fixed all of the other hard sentences. I’m sort of OCD in that way:) I live in the frozen tundra of Wisconsin, near Milwaukee. It’s…fun. But we’re all getting that itch to head south…

          • Giselle Faber

            Lol, yea. I get very attached to certain sentences and characters sometimes in my stories and don`t want to change them.
            Lol, that sounds…fun!:) Lol!:) I don`t think I have ever been to Wisconsin….yea, I am pretty sure I haven`t. Lol, I have never really been South….Well, no further South then Wyoming really! So what all states have you been to?

          • Amelia Coleman

            Oh yes, me too!! I’ve was born in Virginia, and I’ve been to NM, TX, AZ, CO, MN, IL, and all the states you have to drive through to get to NM and VA.

          • Giselle Faber

            Wow, ok, not sure if I have been in that many. I have been to ID, WA, OR, WY, ND, SD, MN, IA, WI, IL, IN, OH, PA, and NY. We drove all the way to New York (in three days) so that is how I picked up most of those sates. Other then a trip to Oregon, a trip to Wyoming (which wasn`t very far!!) a trip to Canada (which I don`t really remember sense I was only four) and a trip to MN, I haven`t really been anywhere. I have never been very far south!! I am not sure if I would like it down there! but I want to go sometime.

          • Amelia Coleman

            Wow, well that’s more than I’ve been! My favorite states are the southern ones, so you should go sometime! I’ve never been out of the country except for once, when I went to Poland. It was so much fun! But I really want to go everywhere when I grow up. At least to the 5 other continents that aren’t Antarctica:))

          • Giselle Faber

            Yea, but ugh that drive to New York!! The first day we drove 16 hours…….
            I would love to!! I really want to go to all the States sometime! I have about half of them!!:)
            Wow, Poland sounds cool!!:) Was there a particular reason you guys went there?
            Lol, what is wrong with Antarctica?! But I must say I would rather go to Europe and Australia! Where do you want to go most in the world?

          • Amelia Coleman

            16…ugh. The most we’ve driven’s like 10. Antarctica’s just too cold. And frozen. And cold. I want to go to all 50 states too! I want to go to China most, just like I’ve always wanted! :) But secondly Brazil or Kenya or Tanzania. I went alone to Poland with my grandparents for my uncle’s ordination. It was amazing, since he’s one of those crazy genius sort of guys who is better than all the tour-guides in Poland combined…

          • Giselle Faber

            Yea, it was pretty nasty. And the sad thing is that it was only some of Montana, all of South Dakota, and a bit of Minnesota that we passed through. It felt like we were going nowhere, and we couldn`t even be like “where are we” and find that we were in a different state. Back east, it is like you blink and you are in a different state (well, not quite, but some of those states are so small!) Lol, yea, I suppose it is cold there, but I would like to go anyways. But it isn`t top on my list of places I want to go. I have always wanted to go to France and learn French, why I do not know. And I especially want to go to Ireland!! And also New Zealand, England, (well, really just about anywhere in Europe!!) and Australia. I love accents, so any of those places would be soo cool!!:) Wow, that sounds really awesome!! (and I thought it was cool that I went all the way to New York for my sister`s profession of vows!! She is a nun in a convent there.) Lol, yea, my Dad is kind of like that sometimes. He has been all over the place, and he knows a lot. He`ll just say something and you`ll be like wow…..ok, didn`t know that!:)

          • Amelia Coleman

            wbu?

  6. Emily McKinnon

    So….I just have to add to the conversation, I know why my story didn’t get anywhere. I am far too Austen-tacious, and I used too many adverbs. Really, I am WAY TOO Austen-tacious! I need to work on this, haha. :) Now, I just really want Bayley Bulletin to do another Story Contest, so that I can try again! :) Thanks for the tips, Dominic! :) Five stars all round! :)

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    • Dominic de Souza

      You’re welcome, @emily_mckinnon:disqus :) In between contests, you should always be writing, and working hard to overcome anything the editors pointed out. And don’t beat yourself up over it; I think everyone starts that way, because we’re trying to emulate all the good writing we’ve read. I know I was terrible when I started out… which is why no one shall ever enter the vault of my first stories, buried very far down… ;)

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      • Emily McKinnon

        I am writing very frequently, I will admit. I have many novels that are in process. :) I will have to try to overcome my Austen-tacious-ness, haha. :) I’m sure your stories must be great! :) I say the same thing about mine. :)

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